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The enigma of life has always fascinated me, especially in Genetics
field
. Studying at Secondary school, especially at A-Level, has made me realize the value of
this
 major. The broad spectrum of fields the subject encompasses, and I am eager to study different areas in greater depth.
This
 interest became stronger when I was a student at high school and our biology teacher presented us with the double-spiral structure of DNA and the methods can recognize anomalies in the fetus, I was utterly thrilled by its astounding beauty. Continuing my studies in
this
field
 at the university provided a good opportunity for me to understand
this
field
 deeper than the past.
Although
 there are many other important dimensions to the study of biology, I like Genetics as a discipline that can help human diagnose and treat Genetic diseases by using personal genomic sequencing data and you can notice a distinguishable connection between genes and health. I want to express my keen on continuing my higher education. An enthusiastic, experienced and conscientious graduate in Genetics
field
, I had a chance to work as a trainee from July 2017 to August 2019 in
Khatam
the capital of Sudan located at the confluence of the Blue Nile and White Nile
Khartoum
 Qazvin lab under supervision of Dr.S.
Moghbeli
 as a director of
Khatam
the capital of Sudan located at the confluence of the Blue Nile and White Nile
Khartoum
 Genetic able to perform many practical techniques
such
 as
:
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extraction of RNA from blood and tissue, extraction of DNA, Synthesize
cDNA
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CDNA
,
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 PCR, Real time PCR and MS PCR
.
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.
These techniques will be really helpful for me in the future. Attending in two workshops about Genetic Engineering and Molecular Cloning Genome, Editing by CRISPR/Cas9 were so useful for me because they are latest techniques which will be handy for me. In terms of a career, my goal is to become a distinguished Genetics professor. Postgraduate studies would be precious to me for several reasons.
First
, it helps me to gain knowledge about Genes and DNA and gain lots of experience in some methods in the laboratory in obstacles and surpassing them, step by step.
In addition
, earning the M.SC degree in
such
 an exciting project fundamentally advances my capabilities,
however
, higher education in itself is a stepping stone; I enjoy studying for its own sake. For several reasons as I mentioned, I believe your university is a great option for me to continue my studies.

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