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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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DEAR MANAGER, I AM A MEMBER OF
NIGHTLIFE
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A NIGHTLIFE
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 MUSICIAN BAND THAT
PRACTISE
 AND ORGANISE A CONCERT IN THE WHITEFIELD COMMUNITY HALL EVERY FRIDAY AND TUESDAY
EVENINGS
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EVENING
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. I AM WRITING
THIS
 TO MAKE SOME
ARRANGEMENT
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ARRANGEMENTS
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 FOR THE
PRACTISE
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PRACTICE
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TIME
 ON SOME OTHER DAYS A WE INFORMED THAT FROM NOW ONWARDS WE ARE UNABLE TO USE THE HALL DUE TO SOME EMERGENCY CONSTRUCTION WORKS. I WOULD LIKE TO KNOW THAT OUR BAND USED TO PERFORM A LIVE DANCE WITH NEW FOLK SONGS TO DELIVER A GOOD MESSAGE TO THE
CIVILIAN
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CIVILIANS
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 ABOUT HUMANITY
THAT IS
 LOST IN THE WORLD NOW.
MOREOVER
, THE MEMBERS OF
THIS
 GROUP STUDY FULL
TIME
 DURING WEEKDAYS AND WORK PART-
TIME
 ON WEEKENDS
THUS
, THEY DO NOT HAVE APPROPRIATE
TIME
 TO COME FOR THE
PRACTISE
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PRACTICE
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 ON THE WEEKENDS.
ALSO
, WHATEVER THE AMOUNT WE EARN
THROUH
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THROUGH
THIS
 CONCERT, GOES TO THE COMMUNITY IMPROVEMENT DEPARTMENT FOR FUTURE RENOVATION OR TO HELP NEEDY INDIVIDUALS
SUCH
 AS IMPOVERISHED
CIVILIAN
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CIVILIANS
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 OR HOMELESS FOLKS.
THEREFORE
, WE WOULD LIKE TO GIVE SOME
SUGGESTION
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SUGGESTIONS
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 FOR THE OPENING
HORS
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HOURS
 OF THE HALL FOR THE PRACTICE. AS I MENTION EARLIER, WE USED TO HAVE A COLLEGE ON THE WEEKDAYS.
HOWEVER
, WE HAVE SUFFICIENT FREE
TIME
 ON MONDAY AND WEDNESDAY AFTERNOONS FROM 3 PM TO 6 PM AFTERWARDS OUR CLASSES WOULD BE STARTED. OWNING TO THE FACT THAT CLASSES ARE BEING HELD IN THE EVENINGS AND MORNINGS ON THOSE DAYS.
HENCE
, IF POSSIBLE, CAN WE COME FOR THE
PRACTISE
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PRACTICE
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 ON
SUGGESTED
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THE SUGGESTED
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 DAYS? I HOPE YOU WOULD UNDERSTAND AND CONSIDER OUR SUGGESTION SERIOUSLY. LOOKING FORWARD TO hearing A POSITIVE RESPONSE FROM YOU AT THE EARLIEST.
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YOURS
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YOUR
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YOURS
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 FAITHFULLY,
SEFALI
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SHEFALI
SAFARI
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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