You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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DEAR MANAGER, I AM A MEMBER OF

NIGHTLIFE

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A NIGHTLIFE

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MUSICIAN BAND THAT

PRACTISE

AND ORGANISE A CONCERT IN THE WHITEFIELD COMMUNITY HALL EVERY FRIDAY AND TUESDAY

EVENINGS

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EVENING

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. I AM WRITING

THIS

TO MAKE SOME

ARRANGEMENT

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ARRANGEMENTS

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FOR THE

PRACTISE

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PRACTICE

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TIME

ON SOME OTHER DAYS A WE INFORMED THAT FROM NOW ONWARDS WE ARE UNABLE TO USE THE HALL DUE TO SOME EMERGENCY CONSTRUCTION WORKS. I WOULD LIKE TO KNOW THAT OUR BAND USED TO PERFORM A LIVE DANCE WITH NEW FOLK SONGS TO DELIVER A GOOD MESSAGE TO THE

CIVILIAN

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CIVILIANS

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ABOUT HUMANITY

THAT IS

LOST IN THE WORLD NOW.

MOREOVER

, THE MEMBERS OF

THIS

GROUP STUDY FULL

TIME

DURING WEEKDAYS AND WORK PART-

TIME

ON WEEKENDS

THUS

, THEY DO NOT HAVE APPROPRIATE

TIME

TO COME FOR THE

PRACTISE

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ON THE WEEKENDS.

ALSO

, WHATEVER THE AMOUNT WE EARN

THROUH

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THROUGH

THIS

CONCERT, GOES TO THE COMMUNITY IMPROVEMENT DEPARTMENT FOR FUTURE RENOVATION OR TO HELP NEEDY INDIVIDUALS

SUCH

AS IMPOVERISHED

CIVILIAN

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CIVILIANS

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OR HOMELESS FOLKS.

THEREFORE

, WE WOULD LIKE TO GIVE SOME

SUGGESTION

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SUGGESTIONS

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FOR THE OPENING

HORS

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HOURS

OF THE HALL FOR THE PRACTICE. AS I MENTION EARLIER, WE USED TO HAVE A COLLEGE ON THE WEEKDAYS.

HOWEVER

, WE HAVE SUFFICIENT FREE

TIME

ON MONDAY AND WEDNESDAY AFTERNOONS FROM 3 PM TO 6 PM AFTERWARDS OUR CLASSES WOULD BE STARTED. OWNING TO THE FACT THAT CLASSES ARE BEING HELD IN THE EVENINGS AND MORNINGS ON THOSE DAYS.

HENCE

, IF POSSIBLE, CAN WE COME FOR THE

PRACTISE

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SUGGESTED

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THE SUGGESTED

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DAYS? I HOPE YOU WOULD UNDERSTAND AND CONSIDER OUR SUGGESTION SERIOUSLY. LOOKING FORWARD TO hearing A POSITIVE RESPONSE FROM YOU AT THE EARLIEST.

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YOURS

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YOUR

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YOURS

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FAITHFULLY,

SEFALI

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SHEFALI

SAFARI

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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9
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

266 words

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