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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
people
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 who hold a
science
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 qualification in
Singapore
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 and
Malaysia
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. A prominent feature is that a significantly lower ratio of
people
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 holds
science
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 qualifications,
that is
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 Master’s and Bachelor’s degrees in
science
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 from
university level
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 studies in both countries. Less than 5% of
people
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 hold a skill in
science
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 at a Master’s degree matched in both
Singapore
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 and
Malaysia
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. There is a significant difference in the proportion of
people
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 holding
science
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 qualifications at
Bachelor
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the Bachelor
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 level between the two countries;
while
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this
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 number is 20% in
Singapore
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, in
Malaysia
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 it is a mere 10%. The rate of
people
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 with school leaving exams in discipline is slightly higher in
Malaysia
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 than in
Singapore
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. 35% of
people
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 in
Malaysia
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 have a
science
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 qualification at
this
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 level,
whereas
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 the number in
Singapore
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 is 5% lower.
Finally
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, more than half the
people
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 in both countries hold no
science
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 qualification at all.
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