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The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare the
percentages
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 of male and female
students
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 getting top
grades
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 in five subjects, which are science,
arts
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, maths,
languages
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, and
humanities
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 in 1960 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
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percentages
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percentage
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 of female
students
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 receiving the highest grade decreased during the time period,
while
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 males have the opposite trend. In 1960, approximately 20% to 30% of males got good
grades
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 in science, maths,
languages
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, and
humanities
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. Even so, only a tenth of male
students
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getting
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get
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 top
grades
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 in
arts
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.
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,
its
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the
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percentages
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 of female
students
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 are 30%. They
also
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 did better in language and
humanities
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, which made up 45% and around 32% in these subjects. In 2000, the
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percentages
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percentage
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 of male
students
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 receiving top
grades
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 almost doubled in
arts
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 and
humanities
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,
whereas
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 the figures in science and maths decreased by half and stopped
around
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at around
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 17%. The
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percentages
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percentage
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 of female
students
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 who got a high
score
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scores
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 in
arts
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,
languages
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, and
humanities
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 decreased significantly after 40 years, which constituted 25% for
arts
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 and
humanities
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 and 30% for
languages
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, students, grades, arts, languages, humanities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • top grades
  • achievement
  • gender disparity
  • educational trends
  • academic performance
  • comparison
  • decade
  • educational policy
  • societal expectations
  • improvement
  • educational attainment
  • graduates
  • academic excellence
  • statistics
  • educational landscape
  • benchmark
  • parity
  • gender roles
  • historical data
  • performance indicators
  • educational improvements
  • longitudinal study
  • scholastic achievement
  • gender gap
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