The line chart illustrated the sale of five different fruit jams ( strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry, and plum) in one nation during the period from 2009 to 2014.
The line chart illustrated the
sale
of five different fruit
jams
( strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry, and plum
) in one nation during the period
from 2009 to 2014.
The sale
of strawberry jam was the highest one
among the five types of Correct pronoun usage
apply
fruit
jams
. It increased from about 3.2 million
units
in 2009 to 7 million
units
in 2014 with only slight
fluctuation through the Correct article usage
a slight
period
. The sale
of grape jams
constantly increased which was only 0.5 million
units
in 2009, the lowest sale
of the year and increased to 4.5% million
in 2014, jumping to the third
place of the year. The sale
of raspberry and cherry jams
both presented similar zig-zag pattern
individually. The Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
sale
of the former was about 2.8 million
units
in 2009 with only about increase
of 1.5 Correct article usage
an increase
million
units
during the period
, the second
highest spot in 2014 like in 2009. The sale
of the latter one was close to 2 million
units
in 2009, peaked at
2012 with Change preposition
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
sale
of 3.2 million
units
and then
dropped to just below 3 million
units
at the end
of the period
which remained in the fourth spot like in 2009. The sale
of plum
jams
decreased gradually through the 5 years from about 2.8 million
units
, the third
place in 2009 and dropped to close to 0 sale
in 2004.
Change to a plural noun
sales
Overall
, among five kinds of fruit
jams
, except the sale
of plum
jam, the sale
of four fruit
jams
presented an upward trend during the period
. Strawberry jams
were the most popular among customers and plum
jams
tended to lose its
customers gradually.Correct pronoun usage
their
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