The line chart illustrated the sale of five different fruit jams ( strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry, and plum) in one nation during the period from 2009 to 2014.

The line chart illustrated the sale of five different fruit jams ( strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry, and plum)  in one nation during the period from 2009 to 2014.
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The line chart illustrated the
sale
of five different
fruit
jams
( strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry, and
plum
) in one nation during the
period
from 2009 to 2014. The
sale
of strawberry jam was the highest
one
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among the five types of
fruit
jams
. It increased from about 3.2
million
units
in 2009 to 7
million
units
in 2014 with only
slight
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a slight
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fluctuation through the
period
. The
sale
of grape
jams
constantly increased which was only 0.5
million
units
in 2009, the lowest
sale
of the year and increased to 4.5%
million
in 2014, jumping to the
third
place of the year. The
sale
of raspberry and cherry
jams
both presented similar zig-zag
pattern
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patterns
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individually. The
sale
of the former was about 2.8
million
units
in 2009 with only about
increase
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an increase
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of 1.5
million
units
during the
period
, the
second
highest spot in 2014 like in 2009. The
sale
of the latter one was close to 2
million
units
in 2009, peaked
at
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2012 with
the
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sale
of 3.2
million
units
and
then
dropped to just below 3
million
units
at the end
of the
period
which remained in the fourth spot like in 2009. The
sale
of
plum
jams
decreased gradually through the 5 years from about 2.8
million
units
, the
third
place in 2009 and dropped to close to 0
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in 2004.
Overall
, among five kinds of
fruit
jams
, except the
sale
of
plum
jam, the
sale
of four
fruit
jams
presented an upward trend during the
period
. Strawberry
jams
were the most popular among customers and
plum
jams
tended to lose
its
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customers gradually.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sale, fruit, jams, plum, period, million, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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