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The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and value table
illustrate
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modify
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 of export earnings during 2015 and 2016 and it is shown, the number of trends in percentage.
However
, each industry from 2015 to 2016
measured
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 in features of
dollars
.
An
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overall
 perspective, it
was
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experienced
rise
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,
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in earning
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earning
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earnings
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 except for gems and jewellery, which experienced moderate drops.
Besides
, the majority of earnings came from petroleum and engineered goods,
while
 textiles and engineered have made
largest
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 up. Since 2015, petroleum in 61
billion
dollars
 and in the
next
 year has came risen to 3% (63
billions
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billion
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).
While
 in that period, engineered products have gone up
to
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 8.5% from 58 to 61
billion
dollars
. As
it
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can be seen
that
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, gems and jewellery in 2015 had a great point, but in
next
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 year has experienced worse down to 5.81% from 43 to 41
billion
dollars
. Agricultural products have
steady
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 changed
about
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 0.81% and textiles went up and had a peak amount
to
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of
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 15.24% (26 to 31
billion
dollars
).
However
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 as it is observed, these products
in
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during the years have massive transport to abroad.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, next, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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