The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.

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of the academic staff in faculties, of a major university by gender, in 2012.

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experienced a downward trend,

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showed an upward trend throughout the period. Both

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rates had fluctuations.

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initially

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had a lower

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, it attracted female's

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at the end

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staff

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was about 56% in arts, being higher than the male's

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by approximately 12%.

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it decreased to almost 35% in business. After that, it showed an incremental of about 75% in education

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and continued to decline in engineering, reaching around 15%.

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, the figure experienced a steady increase during the

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. It increases to 40% in law and 52% in medicine.

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of the period, it again experienced a decrease of about 36%, being lower than the male's

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of academic staff members across the faculties was less than 50% in arts, and it increased in business

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65%. In the education

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, it experienced a high decline of about 25%,

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lower than the female's

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of approximately 50%,

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to increase in engineering by around 85%, being higher than

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any other

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, the figure experienced a steady decline during the

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. It decreases to 60% in law,

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decreased by around 48% in medicine and it continued to increase in science

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by around 64%, outracing the

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