Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hand gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way? Do you think it is a good trend?

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There is no scepticism that adventure activities are rampant trend in the entire globe in these days. The majority of contemporary youth show their interest towards dangerous games.

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has more cons than pros which I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, the

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trend to become fearless

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in the present scenario most of masses participated in adventure activities to eliminate their fear that will be fruitful for them in their upcoming future.Another noteworthy cause of

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phenomenon, watching international shows

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, young generation takes part in these sorts of activities by visualizing some television shows,"Khatron ke Khiladi" is the best epitome here

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by which youth want to do these activities to get name and fame in the society.

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, dangerous games play an indispensable role to relief their stress.

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movement has various advantages rather than its demerit, but these kind of activities some time proved dangerous for people to add more in it

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by doing adventures games certain people lost their lives as it is well said that "life is so precious" so people need to avoid these activities in which they can

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take part in other activities which will beneficial for them not only physically but

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for mental well being. To conclude it,

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phenomenon has a plethora of merits yet loopholes can not be overlooked.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Adrenaline rush
Thrill-seeker
Sense of accomplishment
Push personal limits
Monotony of everyday life
Camaraderie
Societal trends
Media influence
Connection with nature
Physical fitness
Health benefits
Risk-taking behavior
Extreme sports
Adventure
Escaping routine
Stress relief

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