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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are ongoing arguments whether the employee should be required to have a good dressing sense. Some of the organizations are supporting
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 whereas others are opposing it and confessing that efficiency of
work
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 should be considered than
their
people in general
they
 look. From my perspective, good looking appearance is important,
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 the quality of
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also play
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has also played
 a vital role. Nowadays, technology advancement is allowing people to
work
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 from their places without reaching to
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company
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the company
.
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,
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-at-home has been more popular than in the past. In
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 situation,
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 efficiency of the employees will increase considerably. If the
company
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 does not have the employees with smart clothes,
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 they
work
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 hard that can be expect the growth in efficiency which ultimately reach the economical growth of the
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
. The employees with smart clothes just give a pleasant feeling for others, whereas the quality of
work
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 gives long term advantages of production growth, higher salary and other benefits like incentive and bonus ultimately more stable in financially. Good dressing sense gives a spectacular results for the
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 image. Undoubtedly,
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 enhances the personality of the staff and drive more recognition.
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Additionally being
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Additionally, being
 properly dressed, boosts up the morale of the workforce to produce better output and
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 more efficiently.
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, the recent research done by the Colombo university reveals employee's smart dress cause for making the
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 more efficient and popular than others. In conclusion, good appearance makes organization popular and more recognition than others. I think the quality of
task
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the task
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 plays an important role to give the best results for the
company
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.
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, both smart look and productivity of job gives better output for the association.
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