The diagrams below shows time spent watching tv by age and gender in the UK in 1995 and 1999.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows time spent watching tv by age and gender in the UK in 1995 and 1999.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about time spent by Men and
Women
of different old age periods watching television in 1995 and 1999 in the United
kingdom
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.
Overall
, the graph shows
that
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the fact that the older age group of 65 years old and above spent more time
in
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watching
Tv
compare to the other youth period. It is seen from the chart that both males and females between 4 to 15 years watched
the
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Tv
for around 17
hours
in 1995 and in 1999. In the case of 16 to
24 year olds
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24-year-olds
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, no significant change was in males, as they stood around 17
hours
, but females reveals a rise from 21
hours
to 23
hours
. The youth groups of 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 showed
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the
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same pattern
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as
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women
viewers spent more
hours
watching television. In
55
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the 55
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to 64 old age period showed a noticeable change.Men spent 27
hours
, but
women
spent 31 and 32
hours
in 1995 and 1999 respectively. Men above 65 watched
tv
for 3
hours
more in 1999
as well as
women
watched
Tv
for 36
hours
in both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, tv, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagrams
  • time spent
  • watching TV
  • age
  • gender
  • UK
  • 1995
  • 1999
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • overview
  • analysis
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • differences
  • similarities
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