The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.
The
table
shows the rates of household income
which
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apply
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spent
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were spent
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on four items in five
Eouropian
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European
countries.
Overall
, what stands out from the
table
is that the level of housing is
dominant
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more dominant
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than
others
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the others
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in three of the countries(France, Germany and
UK
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the UK
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)
whereas
in Turkey and
Spain
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,Spain
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people prefer to spend
the
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apply
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most of
the
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their
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income
for
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on
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food and drink. Looking at the
table
in more detail, in France and Germany the percentage of housing spending ranks first at around one-
third
,
while
that of clothing
are
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the lowest share at 7% and 15% respectively.
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pattern can be seen in
UK
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the UK
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, housing spending is
observered
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observed
the
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as the
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highest indicator at 37%,
while
the percentage of clothing and entertainment are the same at precisely 11%. In terms of
Turkey
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,Turkey
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the figure for food and drink is the
second
highest in the
table
with 36 % which is approximately 4 times as high as the level of entertainment expenditure.
Finally
, in
Spain
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,Spain
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the indicator of food and drink spending is reported
31
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at 31
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%
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which
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that is
twice as much as the
rates
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rate
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of entertainment spending
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Household income
  • Allocate
  • Basic necessities
  • Expenditures
  • Essentials
  • Economy
  • Living conditions
  • Standard of living
  • Cultural significance
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial prioritization
  • Noticeable trends
  • Unusual allocations
  • Society's values
  • Economic status
  • Illustrates
  • Highlights
  • Comparison
  • Analyze
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