The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.
The
table
shows the rates of household income which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
spent
on four items in five Add a missing verb
were spent
Eouropian
countries. Correct your spelling
European
Overall
, what stands out from the table
is that the level of housing is dominant
than Correct quantifier usage
more dominant
others
in three of the countries(France, Germany and Correct article usage
the others
UK
) Correct article usage
the UK
whereas
in Turkey and Spain
people prefer to spend Add a comma
,Spain
the
most of Correct article usage
apply
the
income Change the word
their
for
food and drink.
Looking at the Change preposition
on
table
in more detail, in France and Germany the percentage of housing spending ranks first at around one-third
, while
that of clothing are
the lowest share at 7% and 15% respectively. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Similar
pattern can be seen in Add an article
A similar
UK
, housing spending is Correct article usage
the UK
observered
Correct your spelling
observed
the
highest indicator at 37%, Change preposition
as the
while
the percentage of clothing and entertainment are the same at precisely 11%. In terms of Turkey
the figure for food and drink is the Add a comma
,Turkey
second
highest in the table
with 36 % which is approximately 4 times as high as the level of entertainment expenditure. Finally
, in Spain
the indicator of food and drink spending is reported Add a comma
,Spain
31
%Change preposition
at 31
Correct pronoun usage
which
that is
twice as much as the rates
of entertainment spendingFix the agreement mistake
rate
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