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Write about the following topic: •Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The world has progressed phenomenally.New technologies are being developed in the world
,
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,
such
 as computer and communication devices.In
this
 present
days
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day
 education is very crucial for the
job
.
Plethora
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A plethora
 of people
think
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thinks
 that the university fees are climbing
day
 by
day
.While,
plummete
drop sharply
plummet
 the employment and universities offer only practical degree and they should not teach history subjects and philosophy.I partially agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will discuss both the views and give appropriate reasons.
Firstly
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,
we all know the technology change rapidly in
this
 modern world.
University
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The university
 provides all modern
technology
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technological
 facilities,
such
 as computer and communication device.
This
facilities
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facility
 very expensive.So increasing university fees
day
 by
day
.
Secondly
,
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,
they focus only practical
knowledge
 and offer practical degree courses because in
this
modern era all
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modern era with all
company
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companies
wants
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want
 practical skill
for
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to
 work.
For example
,
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,
nowadays web developing companies want practical skill.
on
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On
 the other hand
,
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,
arts
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art
subject
 like philosophy and history very significant for
knowledge
.
Moreover
,
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,
this
subjects
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subject
teach
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taught
 us how to communicate with people and brings out
creativity
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the creativity
 of students.
In addition
,
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,
which helps us
thinking
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think
to think
 more logically. The government
job
 wants
knowledge
 of
student
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the student
students
.
Furthermore
,
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,
arts
subject
 very
expendient
serving to promote your interest
expedient
 for
government
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a government job
government jobs
job
. In conclusion, I concur that practical
knowledge
 and history
knowledge
 both are pivotal for
job
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the job
a job
jobs
. While, universities should offer both subjects like practical
subject
 and
arts
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arts subjects
an arts subject
subject
.

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