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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Energy
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 can be produced by using an Input Source
such
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 as Wind, Water or
Wave
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. Wind
Energy
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 has been widely used since the 1980s and is
evident
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 by the increase in the number of Windmills across the world. Lately, Researchers have shown that a
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Wave-
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energy
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Machine
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 can be three times more effective than a Wind
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Machine
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. At first glance, the design of the
wave
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energy
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machine
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 may appear complex
however
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 the description of its inner workings detailed below will help a Reader understand it better. As the name suggests,
Wave
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Energy
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 Machines depend on
Wave
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 as its Input Source. With the
wave
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energy
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machine
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 installed in the seabed, the
wave
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 direction is taken into consideration. As the water levels rise, the chambers located in the
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Wave-
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energy
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machine
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 push the airflow upwards. Through the Air Duct located at the top,
further
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 air is pushed towards the Turbines.
This
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 increased airflow pressure causes the Turbines to rotate. The rotating turbines generate electricity which is
in turn
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 passed through the top Chamber to the Output Source. The Location of the
Wave
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Energy
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Machine
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 plays a significant role in the amount of
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that is
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 produced. Larger
waves
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 produce high output
whereas
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 small
waves
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 produce low Output. It might seem obvious to
then
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 install
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Wave-
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energy
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 machines in areas where there are large
waves
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. An important point to consider
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however
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, is that
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Wave-
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Energy
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Machine
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 Installation in areas with high
waves
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incur
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 high installation costs. So selecting suitable locations for Installation needs a thorough cost-benefit analysis upfront.
To conclude
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, a
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Wave-
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Energy
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Machine
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 Installed at Suitable Locations and designed well can be extremely beneficial in generating high
energy
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, wave, wave-energy, machine, waves with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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