Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are some people
consider
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considered
that parents should
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organise
group
activities but
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activities, but
some people think children should learn how to
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make more compact by or as if by pressing
compress
themselves on their own. I am going to discuss both these view in
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statement. On the one hand, when the children are quite young
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3-5 years old), probably they can’t organise the activities on their own. So, maybe parents should help their children to take part in organised group activities in their spare time.
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, picnic, hiking or Barbeque in their house. I have still remembered that the barbecue with my family and some friends.
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, it is impossible to do the barbeque only children, thanks to my parents, I had fun memories and I knew that it was hard to set up a charcoal fire.
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, when the children grow enough
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over 6 years old), they can arrange the activities on their own in their spare time. I have seen quite often on the front of their house what they do “Lemonade stand”
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That activity is very popular as
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child's
children's
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they can learn how to make the lemonade, perhaps it would be the
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time to
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a form of rummy using two decks of cards and four jokers; jokers and deuces are wild; the object is to form groups of the same rank
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made
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the lemonade by only themselves.
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, children can learn how to earn money from the activities.They will be rewarding and fulfilling in
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actions
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action
. To sum up, the children will know that they enjoy the activities
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provided
by their parents
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and the activities that they have accomplished alone will have their own ideas and experience
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success or
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, the experience is very significant to improve
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will be related
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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