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The tourist industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There has been a significant increase in the number of people who are travelling around and
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 trend is likely to continue as travelling has become one of individuals’ one of
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 pastimes.
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, some people argue that
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 a trend brings no benefit to the
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 country
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 as I see it, the booming
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industry
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 benefits the tourist destinations in many aspects. It is obvious that
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 promotes the local economy. Numerous visitors flood into the area spending tons of money
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on transportation, hotels, restaurants
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 a variety of recreational activities, which will definitely boost the entire economy of the area.
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industry
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 contributes to
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 major part of the country’s GDP.
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,
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countries
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 can
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 benefit culturally. By travelling to
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other foreign
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, visitors gain a
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 perspective of foreign cultures
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thereby promoting
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mutual understanding between different nations which is
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 best interests of both visitors and local
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. Admittedly, there are some cases
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where uncontrolled
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 can negatively impact the
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countries
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.
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, a multitude of tourists crowded into the
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 country and it will cause disturbance to the local residents. In some extreme cases, tourists may produce a huge amount of rubbish and may even damage the local cultural heritage sites.
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, these unpleasant behaviours of tourists are still a minor part of the whole
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industry
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 and with proper management and regulation, all these negative impacts can be minimized or even avoided completely.
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, the ever-growing
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industry
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 is beneficial to tourist destinations in terms of their economy and culture, but we still need to pay more attention to
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 the local environment and local residents.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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