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The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph above
depict
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depicts
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 the range of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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car which are used by residents and non-residents in British in ten years.
While
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 the number of
resident’s
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residents
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 people whose travels by
cars
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car
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased before 2000, it starts to decrease
after
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this
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 time to make the number of
visitor
Change to a plural noun
visitors
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 higher than the average of the residents. The main cause of
this
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 change is that
the
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people have to start
pay
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paying
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 fees for parking. After three years a main
different
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appear
Correct subject-verb agreement
appears
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 when the government take
procedures
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procedure
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 of
close
Wrong verb form
closing
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 the highway of
west
Add an article
the west
a west
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 area which make the number of
resident’s
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residents
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 trips more than the strangers again.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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