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the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people funding
money
Use synonyms
 to charity by 5 different age ranges for the years 1990 and 2010 in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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.
overall
Linking Words
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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 people in the past
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 given more
money
Use synonyms
 compared to
present
Add an article
the present
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.the pattern differs at the age
50
Change preposition
of 50
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 in the two years. In 1990,above 40% of the people of
age
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,age
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 36-50 donated more
money
Use synonyms
 in
figure
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the figure
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.the 18-25s contributed less
money
Use synonyms

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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