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It was observed that in some countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at universities . What are the causes ? What effects does this have on society?

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According to some recent observations on the number of university undergraduates who study
science
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 today most students feel reluctant to take
science
 classes
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 From my viewpoint
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 since
science
 education is complex and time-consuming process in which students are required to have a natural flair
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 insufficient number of students go
further
 in
science
.
Consequently
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this
 may have a profound​ impact on society, affecting
science
 literacy levels of people as well as the image of a
country
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First
 and foremost
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 one should be naturally gifted and try desperately to make a breakthrough in
science
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 and
this
 demands great patience
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 Most university students obviously lack
natural ability
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the natural ability
 to study
science
 subjects
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 I think
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this
 is the main reason that causes a growing reluctance among them.
Moreover
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science
 research is
lengthy and difficult process
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a lengthy and difficult process
 whose outcomes might be unsatisfactory
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 and spending years and putting in a great deal of effort seems
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 at times
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 less likely to pay off
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This
 decline in the number of students who study
science
 subjects has an adverse effect on
country's reputation
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the country's reputation
a country's reputation
 as improvement in
science
 is of utmost importance in determining the status of a
country
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 Countries
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for example
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 that have distinguished and professional scientists always take
leading part
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a leading part
the leading part
leading parts
 in international policy
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 and vice versa the ones that lack
respected
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respect
 scientists are usually economically disadvantaged as they are less likely to have power in ruling the world
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 Not only is
country's status
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the country's status
 liable to lower if students stop learning
science
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 but the system as well as methods of educating the citizens of the
country will be soon
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country will soon be
 out-of-date in consequence of which inhabitants of
this
country
 might be educationally backward
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 In conclusion
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 since studying
science
 subjects are
lengthy and difficult process
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a lengthy and difficult process
 which requires innate ability, fewer and fewer students have interest in it. As an outcome
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this
 will profoundly impact the society
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 making people scientifically illiterate and the reputation of a
country
 far lower.

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