Men are placed in mist high-level jobs. Government should encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women. Do you agree or disagree?
Most of the high-powered job vacancies are filled by the man.
Thus
, there is a belief that more women
should also
be promoted to such
top jobs. However
, I take issue with this
view as it seems somewhat unrealistic. Firstly
, such
highly paid jobs demand some sacrifices by an individual. This
means that steps— needs to be taken to come to the stage of a top worker— are quite depressing and demanding both physically and mentally. In comparison, women
can hardly make such
sacrifices because of their need to strike balance
between work career and family. Correct article usage
a balance
Thus
they can find it rather challenging and are more prone to give up. Another most
likely explanation would be that it can be difficult for Correct quantifier usage
apply
women
to compete with men
. More specifically, men
possess better opportunities to be recruited as they have a dramatic career- that woman
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women
In addition
, women
tend to be more emotional that
hinders their progress of being promoted. Correct pronoun usage
which
For example
, when there are 50 workers under a woman's control, emotions can make their job difficult. In comparison, men
tend to be relatively stricter which enables them to be leaders. Thus
, it is sensible that men
are recruited more compared to women
. Advocates of gender equality argue that there should be equal job opportunities for both man
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men
woman
as it is unfair Fix the agreement mistake
women
while
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that
men
are paid more than women
. However
, there is actually no evidence to support this
view. By way of conclusion, I confidently believe that the level of work of women
's being on par with that of the
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men
is completely
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion