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Men are placed in mist high-level jobs. Government should encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women. Do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the high-powered job vacancies are filled by the man.
Thus
 , there is a belief that more
women
 should
also
 be promoted to
such
 top jobs.
However
 , I take issue with
this
 view as it seems somewhat unrealistic.
Firstly
 ,
such
 highly paid jobs demand some sacrifices by an individual.
This
 means that steps— needs to be taken to come to the stage of a top worker— are quite depressing and demanding both physically and mentally. In comparison,
women
 can hardly make
such
 sacrifices because of their need to strike
balance
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 between work career and family.
Thus
 they can find it rather challenging and are more prone to give up. Another
most
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likely explanation would be that it can be difficult for
women
 to compete with
men
. More specifically,
men
 possess better opportunities to be recruited as they have a dramatic career- that
woman
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women
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can lack.
In addition
 ,
women
 tend to be more emotional
that
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which
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 hinders their progress of being promoted.
For example
 , when there are 50 workers under a woman's control, emotions can make their job difficult. In comparison,
men
 tend to be relatively stricter which enables them to be leaders.
Thus
 , it is sensible that
men
 are recruited more compared to
women
. Advocates of gender equality argue that there should be equal job opportunities for both
man
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men
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 and
woman
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women
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 as it is unfair
while
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men
 are paid more than
women
.
However
 , there is actually no evidence to support
this
 view. By way of conclusion, I confidently believe that the level of work of
women
's being on par with that of
the
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men
 is
completely
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 wrong opinion
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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