Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even ass a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

Some people believe that
video
games can be useful in terms of fun and academic performance, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
argue that it has a negative impact on people. In
this
essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss both benefits and drawbacks of it. Nowadays, there are plenty of
video
games that we can purchase and enjoy with playing. There are a lot of categories of games
such
as strategic, fighting, racing and others. There are
also
a lot of brain games that playing
them we
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them, we
can improve our educational skills.
For example
, if we will play games related to mathematics, it is very beneficial for our calculating skills.
Also
, by playing the sudoku and crosswords, we can relax the leisure time with
benefit
Suggestion
benefits
the benefit
.
However
, there are some disadvantages of
video
games which are very harmful for people who play them. On the internet we can see the advertisements of
such
games that the mission of them is violating or killing people.
Such
games are very harmful for people’s psychology.
Also
, sometimes people play games that involve a lot of money or time. If
person
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a person
the person
people
will lose in
such
games they
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games, they
can be very
upset
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upsetting
and sometimes kill themselves. In conclusion, playing
video
games can be beneficial in terms of relaxing after
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
or doing something useful.
However
, due to the plenty of harmful games,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think the
advantahed
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
of
video
games will not outweigh the disadvantages of it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmless fun
  • educational tool
  • adverse effect
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving
  • strategic thinking
  • educational content
  • mental stimulation
  • social interaction
  • teamwork
  • excessive play
  • physical health issues
  • eye strain
  • repetitive strain injuries
  • addictive
  • academic performance
  • work productivity
  • social relationships
  • violent video games
  • increased aggression
  • desensitization to violence
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