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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #job #satisfaction #security
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There is no doubt, that there are two different types of jobs, the
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 which means profession which gives pleasure and does not threaten human health and even more so his life. The other type is
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a job
the job
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continuing through life
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mployment. It is considerably by some, that
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the workplace
s imperative, while other mass of people think that security of
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 is more vital. On the one hand, it is undoubted that having permanent jobs is very beneficial. At
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, these jobs are conductive people to have a stable life since they have financial support every month.
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an reckon on their expenses on social and domestic issues accurately, which is very convenient for them. The
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en people don’t care much about fi
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roblems, they can enjoy life easily,
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aking up new hobbies as playing tennis or bowling or they
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ich once wanted to read.
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think that
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satisfaction
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 is much more significant .
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think so, because of the fact about human provided interest. People can definitely give their energy to things they are doing. By doing so, they are inclined to come up with new ideas and cr
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creativity
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hich may greatly contribute to the growth of productivity in their work. To
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think that
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permanent
obs is convenient, gaining
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 and fulfilment on what we are doing is more important.
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