The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
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At the first stage
in the life cycle of a silkworm, the moth lays its eggs. Around ten days later, silkworm larvae hatch from the eggs; these larvae feed on mulberry leaves.
Then
, after four to six weeks, the larvae become covered in
silk
thread
, and it takes between three and eight days for a full cocoon to be produced. For
silk
cloth production, a cocoon is first selected and
then
boiled in water. After boiling, the
silk
thread
that makes up the cocoon is unwound, and
then
several strands of
thread
are twisted together. At the fifth and sixth stages in the process, the
thread
can either be dyed and
then
woven into
silk
fabric, or it can be woven first and
then
dyed
subsequently
.
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