The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
The pie graphs illustrate the result of a survey of
children
Change noun form
children's
activities
.
The first graph illustrates the cultural and leisure activities
that boys
participate in, whereas
the second
graph illustrates the activities
in which the
Correct article usage
apply
girls
participate.
The two graphs have an enormous difference between the girls
and boy's Change noun form
girl's
girls'
activities
, one massive difference is in reading, girls
tend to read more often than boys
also
girls
neither play
basketball nor soccer Change the verb form
plays
while
it occupies 43% of boys
Change noun form
boys'
boy's
activities
, also
boys
do not dance nor play netball while
42% of girls
activities
consist them.
although
there are enormous differences between the activities
between boys
and girls
, there is one match in activities
, music consists 10
% of boy's and girl's Change preposition
of 10
activities
, it's the only match between the activities
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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