The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graphs represent how much money the British people spent on fast food weekly and
the
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uses of them over a period of 20 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the high and
average earnings
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average-earnings
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groups
purchasing
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hamburgers
most
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the most
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,
while
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the
low salary
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low-salary
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people spent more on
fish
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and
chips
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.
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, burgers and
pizza
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have
been
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significantly increased over that time.
According to
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the bar graph, high and middle-livelihood classes spend on hamburgers around 42, and 34
pence
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/person, respectively,
whereas
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the low economic level
spend
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less
than15
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than 15
pence
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on the same type of junk food. For
fish
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and
chips
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, the mid-class of profit expends more than other groups (25
pence
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per person),
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, the rich and poor people
spending
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almost the same about 19
pence
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. As for the
last
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type of fast food (
pizza
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), those who
earning
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high
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a high
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income tend to spend the highest almost 20
pence
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. Comparing to the middle and low
wage
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wages
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they spent nearby 12 and 8
pence
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for each person, respectively.
According to
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the line graph, we can see that in 1970 the consumption of hamburgers and
pizza
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(the average between 30 to 100g)
were
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lower than
fish
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and
chips
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which was 300 grams. Over
the
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time the first
tow
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two
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items started to rise until they reach
to
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more
that
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than
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500 grams for burgers and about 290g for
pizza
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in 1990.
However
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,
fish
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and
chips
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has
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been gradually decreased
till
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to
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200g in 1985, after that slightly recovered to reach more
that
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than
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200 grams in 1990.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, pizza, pence with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Fast food
  • Income groups
  • High-income
  • Low-income
  • Medium-income
  • Hamburgers
  • Fried chicken
  • Fish & chips
  • Consumption
  • Trends
  • Significant increase
  • Decline
  • Popularity
  • Spending patterns
  • Consumption trends
  • Lifestyle
  • Preferences
  • Prices
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