The table illustrates the average monthly sales of ice drinks, tea and coffee, juices, cocktails at small café from January to April.

The table illustrates the average monthly sales of ice drinks, tea and coffee, juices, cocktails at small café from January to April.
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The table illustrates the average monthly
sales
of
ice
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drinks
,
tea
and
coffee
, juices,
cocktails
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and cocktails
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at small café from
January
to April.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the number of
cocktails
sold in
January
saw the lowest trend in the period given,
while
tea
and
coffee
sales
were the highest in
January
.
Furthermore
, the
sales
of
ice
drinks
and
cocktails
remained unchanged in
January
and February. Out of the four types of
drinks
, the number of
tea
and
coffee
, juices was
noticeable
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higher over
a
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the
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shown period. There was a moderate decrease in the demand
of
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for
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tea
and
coffee
, which stood at 250 in
January
,
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but had fallen
180
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to 180
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by April.
However
,
although
there was a small growth,
sales
of juices were the same
in
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at
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the end of the given period at 200. In terms of
ice
drinks
and
cocktails
, they both showed
unchanged
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an unchanged
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trend in the first two months 150 and 90.
While
the number of
ice
drinks
sold underwent a significant increase to 190 and 230 respectively, cocktail sails decreased slightly from 110 to 100 in the final month.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, ice, drinks, tea, coffee, cocktails, january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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