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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
Income has always been an essential factor in
life
. Some people believe it is necessary to have a higher wage rather than to be happy with your
job
. I slightly agree with
this
 idea and will discuss my opinion in
this
 essay. As far as I am concerned, people
work
 to earn. Money is needed in
this
 competitive world and having a luxurious
life
 is expensive.
For example
, a good school for children has high fees and without high wage children cannot be sent there. But it
also
 needs to be mentioned that a high earning needs more
work
 pressure and
work
 hours. Increased
work
 hours results in less time for family being together. Thereby, family disruption and health-challenging problems can be considered as the ramifications of High wages.
Hence
, money is always tempting, but
also
 hard to achieve. Without a shadow of doubt,
job
 satisfaction brings you a delightful sense that cannot be changed with money. When a person is happy with his
job
, efficiency increases significantly and there are no compulsory on doing the
job
. Being in the area of own's interest makes every step of success easy and pleasant. Mental disorder is less seen in people who their
job
 appeals to them. So, a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, good relationships and fast-paced success is the benefits of
job
 satisfaction. In conclusion, I believe,
although
 without money
life
 is difficult, it is not everything. Money does not bring happiness, but when we are satisfied with our jobs we bring joy to the environment around us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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