You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

Dear
Mr.
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Forbes, I am writing to thank you for all the great moments which you bring to our company's meeting in your
hotel
that night and
also
inform you briefly about some unpleasant
feedbacks
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from our guests about the meals. The perfect service from servants and waiters in the ceremony was as perfect as everybody
were
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excited with,
on the other
hand
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the lighting system made
a fabulous moments
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for all of my colleagues. Passing through all
good
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impressions which your
hotel
brought us, some whispers could be heard during the dinner. Some of the guests were displeased about why soups were too salty
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or talking about myself, I seriously like spicy foods, I ordered hot chicken but I didn’t taste
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any pepper inside that. Despite the fact that the "Rockstar
Hotel
" has
great
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investment in
stuff
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staff
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behavior
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, the perfect surrounding and excellent customer service, I wonder why the focus on the meal part is a bit weak. I would like to suggest that there should be a quality assurance system to check the taste of the foods before they
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out of the kitchen.
Also
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it is possible to prepare some feedback participation machine
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the lobby to briefly ask customers about their view of
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services. I look forward to
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from you and become
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about improvements in the system. Kind Regards, Amir Abolfazli

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  • thirdly
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compliments
  • Ambiance
  • Professionalism
  • Hospitality
  • Quality
  • Variety
  • Freshness
  • Catering
  • Menu options
  • Dietary requirements
  • Feedback
  • Survey
  • Collaboration
  • Improvements
  • Rectify
  • Gastronomy
  • Culinary
  • Hospitality industry
  • Client satisfaction
  • Constructive criticism
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