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Fossil fuels (coal, oil and natural gas) are the main sources in many countries. However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In many countries, fossil fuels have been consumed with a big amount and played an important role in certain industries.
However
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, governments in some countries have made renewable sources of
energy
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such
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 as wind and solar become more popular. In my opinion, I strongly believe that supporting the usage of sustainable powers is a positive development.
On the other hand
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, there are challenges to apply alternative sources of
energy
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.
First
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 of all, generator systems
such
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 as polar panels or windmills requires advanced technologies which are not available in developing – countries.
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, initial costs to build proper facilities for renewable
energy
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 are much
more higher
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higher
 than fossil fuels so that authorities are not willing to invest in alternative sources of
energy
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.
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, the sustainable powers have been proved to have lots of advantages by scientists.
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, scientific studies have proved that renewable
energy
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 does not harm the
environment
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 as the fossil fuels.
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, solar
energy
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 is generated by polar panels which gather
heats
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heat
 from the sun,
then
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 transfer into electricity. The whole progress is very friendly to the
environment
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 while burning coals or petrol causes serious effects
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 as the greenhouse, global warming.
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, natural resources
such
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 as sun, wind and tide are free and unlimited while formation of fossil fuels
require
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requires
 thousands of years.
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,
price
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the price
prices
 of solar or wind power becomes cheaper in comparison with petrol or coals. For that reason, it can be concluded that not only the
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environment but
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environment, but
also
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 economy will be benefitted from sustainable
energy
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. In a nutshell, it is undeniable that alternative powers have brought positive impacts on the
environment
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 and economies.
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, governments should invest more money to build infrastructure enables
developments
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developers
 of renewable
energy
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.

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