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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
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In the
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 bar chart is shown the
percentage
 of the world's population living in urban areas, it highlights that many people
have
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moved to urban areas between 1950 and 2007,
in addition
in
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it
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predicts
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predicting
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 that even more will do the same
until
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by
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 2050. The labels along the
x-asis
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x-axis
 represent the six
world's
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world
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region
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regions
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. It is easy to see that there is
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the non
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non part
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non-part
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 where the
percentage
 has decreased. There are some world parts, like North America or
oceanic
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the oceanic
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, where the
percentage
 was already high in 1950,
whereas
 in Asia and
Africa
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,Africa
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 it was lower, but has increased fast. Oceania is the region which shows the smallest
percentage
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of
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in
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population
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the population
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 living in cities. It can
also
 be seen that in Latin America, Asia and Africa in 2050 the
percentage
 will double compared to that of one hundred years before.
Finally
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 it is esteemed that nearly all of
the
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america's
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 population will live in urban areas in 2050.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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