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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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In
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 table, there are five
countries
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 that spend their income on
food
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, housing, clothing, and entertainment. France, Germany and the US spend about a quarter on
food
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. Turkey (36%) and Spain (31%) spend large amounts on
food
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. These two
countries
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 spend a very small amount on housing - 20-18%.
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, the US, Germany and France spend large amounts on housing (37%, 33%, 31%) All five
countries
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 spend less on clothing. France and Spain spend 7-8% on clothing
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 and the remaining 10-15%. They don't spend much on entertainment, either. From 10-15%. Only Germany Is 19%. All 5
countries
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 spend a small amount on clothing and entertainment. And the largest incomes are housing and
food
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