The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
The diagram illustrates how married people spend their time doing unpaid work per week in three different periods.
Overall
, it can be easy to see that the number of hours
women
getting
involved in housework, childcare and gardening had Wrong verb form
get
tendency
to be much more Add an article
a tendency
the tendency
then
Replace the word
than
men
's one
.
As regards Correct pronoun usage
apply
period
without children, the average Correct article usage
the period
hours
of unpaid work per week done by married women
reached the bottom at 30 hours
which was nearly twice as much as men
's hours
. Moving to having
1-2 Change the verb form
have
children
time, Change noun form
children's
women
's hours
rocketed at
over 50 Change preposition
to
hours
which increased by roughly 20 hours
compared with the first one. Meanwhile
the number of Add a comma
,Meanwhile
hours
men
spending
taking over household duties seemed to be erratic at around 18 Wrong verb form
spent
hours
.
At
the period with over three children, married Change preposition
In
women
peaked at 55 hours
while
the opposite was true for men's
one which was at 15 Change noun form
men
hours
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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