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Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins

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The trends nowadays are towards using credit and debit cards
instaead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of cash
money
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. In
this
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 essay we will discuss both sides the virtue and drawback of
this
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 recent
trends
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trend
. More and more people would agree that using cards
instead
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 of many have pros
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 as
be
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being
 safe and ready to
use
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 every time. On the
countrary
very opposed in nature or character or purpose
contrary
, we cannot ignore the disadvantages like debt
of
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by
 using excessively and
bad consequence
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the bad consequence
 of
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 situation.
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 of all, recent researchers indicate that numerous of people who are not carrying lots of
money
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with
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to
 themselves benefit of
this
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 circumstance. What I am trying to say that if you went out with lots of
money
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 in your pocket
then
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 you will endanger your
money
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. Because, the
money
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 might be
fallen
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falling
 into place without noticing.
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, when you are carrying less
money
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 with you
this
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 danger will die out automatically. On an
occassion
an event that occurs at a critical time
occasion
, my cousin
have went
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has gone
 out
money
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 to hang out with his friends and had brought the lots of
money
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 so that spend. Yet,
money
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have fallen
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has fallen
 into place and he
have not noticed
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had not noticed
has not noticed
. He should not have brought that much
money
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 and he could
use
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 cards
instead
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 of
money
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.
On the other hand
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, despite the advantages many people have got used
to
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to using
use
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 the
this
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 payment way.
However
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, using
this
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 mode excessively comes with some threat
such
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 as going into debt and hacking.
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 to say, when people rely on
this
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 method to pay every time and
use
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 in every trade the they will be
face
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facing
 a high bill by the end of
month
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the month
. According to the many economic reports, there are
great many people
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a great many people
 who are
payer
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paying
 on account of using forwardly and they have to pay
this
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 debt in some way. As a consequence, ın
this
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 light of
this
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 information mentioned above, it can be clearly said that using different payment methods rather that
money
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have
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has
 pros and cons. In spite of
advantage
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the advantage
advantages
, people should be more watchful of its
use
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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