You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
chart shows Japan's populace for a long period from 1950 to 2055. It's clear from the chart that the
overall
numbers have been increasing except for the
last
20 years.
According to
what is shown, starting from 1950 the total gradually grew from 84.1 million to reach 123.6 million in 1990. After that, the statistics remained stable in the age from 1990 to 2015. After 2015, the numbers will considerably decrease to 89.9 m in 2055. The table presents the state of people who are 65 or over. We can notice from the statistics that the total number of
elderlies
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elderly
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is going up and the percentage is jumping. With
this
jumping
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jump
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, we can find that the percentage of
elderly
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the elderly
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will climb to
present
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the present
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half of
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the society
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society
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society's
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percent
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per cent
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in the
last
few years.
To sum up
, we could say that Japan's population is increasing throughout the years. And the
percent
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percentage
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of elderly people
being
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is
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higher.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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