You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants athe meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you in order to give feedback after my company's meeting, which was happening in your hotel
last
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week. All my colleagues were appreciated by your hotel, particularly in
kind
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the kind
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atmosphere which was done by your staff, modern architecture and design of the hall, rooms, the
dinning
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room, the meeting room. Everything there is done in modern style what is important nowadays. But
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I would like to tell you about the problems with which my team had met during the lunch.
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of all, if it is possible, add different juices, because you said you have European cuisine, but we couldn't find any juices.
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Also
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most of the part of our team were vegans and when I arranged our meeting with your manager I told her about
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. Unfortunately,
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part of the people
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unhappy about
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fact. I am kindly asking you to struggle with these problems
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as juices, what is important
on
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meetings and at launches. What is more to the effort on
vegan
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the vegan
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menu what is really important nowadays too, because there are
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of people who have
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lifestyle for the well-done job of your hotel. Looking forward to
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with you again. Yours faithfully, Maria Ivanova
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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