The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph indicates how many people were part of the academic
staff
in the faculties of a major
university
in 2012, with a
further
classification by gender. As illustrated by the graph, the
percentage
of male academic
staff
members was significantly higher in faculties that deal with science and engineering compared with the
percentage
of female colleagues. The analysis of data shows that the number of women working in
education
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faculty
of the
university
was considerably higher than that of
men
in the same field, (reaching around 75% and about 25% respectively).
On the other hand
, the
percentage
of
men
as engineer tutors was five times as much of female engineer tutors in the
university
in 2012 (
men
were approximately 85%
whereas
women were just under 20%).
However
, the proportion of male academic
staff
members was nearly as much as the female colleagues in the medical
faculty
(with the former peaked at around 45% and the latter at about 50%). In the business
faculty
though, the
percentage
of male
staff
was twice as much as female
staff
on
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the corresponding field. Specifically, around 60% of
men
and about 35% of women worked in the business
faculty
of
the
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major
university
in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words staff, university, percentage, faculty, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • faculty
  • academic staff
  • proportion
  • disparity
  • trends
  • significance
  • broader societal trends
  • gender equality
  • university environment
  • implications
  • predominantly
  • minority
  • skewed
  • equal representation
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