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People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchase. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

#people #credit #cards #purchase #outweight
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Nowadays,
technology
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 has become an indispensable part and parcel of our life. We cannot imagine our life without
technology
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.
people
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People
 have used
credit
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 cards for paying everywhere for everything.
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 essay will highlight that it is certainly advantages despite a few inevitable drawbacks.
in
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In
this
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 modern era, people live with
technology
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.
we
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We
 use a
credit
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card
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 on our daily basis.
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credit
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The credit card
Credit card
card
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 is a small
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technology gadget
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technology, gadget
, which has made
for
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of
from
 plastic and uses a small chip with the different numbers
.
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.
people
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People
 have used
this
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technology
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 everywhere.
due
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Due
 to
credit
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 cards, we buy everything without giving paper
money
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.
in
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In
this
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technology
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 gives you the opportunity to pay
money
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 in digital form.
every
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Every
people
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person
have
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has
 a
credit
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card
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 in
this
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 world and people know very well that how to utilize it wisely. There are lots of advantages to using
credit
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 cards.
the
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The
 major benefit is people do not have to worry about caring their
money
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for
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For
 example: if people forgot their
money
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 at home they can easily pay through the
credit
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card
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.
it
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It
 is very easy to pay to the
credit
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card
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.
the
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The
 youngster has used highly
this
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technology
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 for their convenience.
sometimes
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Sometimes
 they pay many online to their friend and their love.
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also
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Also
, now time help of the
credit
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card
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 people can pay an online payment in any situation.
the
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The
second
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 benefit is paper
money
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 is very hard to carry with us in our
pocket but
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pocket, but
 a
credit
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card
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 is a handy gadget and we can easily carry in our pocket. Now, through the light
on
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of
 the disadvantages.
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this
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This
 is a modern
technology
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 so the youngster has proper knowledge about
this
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technology
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 that how to use it
and where use it
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and where to use it
.
but
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But
, elder people has not enough knowledge about
this
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technology
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 so they have to face it lots of problems while using a
credit
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card
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.
sometimes owing
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Sometimes, owing
Sometimes owing
 to some
circumstances people
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circumstances, people
 lost their
card
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 and it has very difficult for a person to make a new
card
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 instantly.
it
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It
 has its own limits for payment.
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for
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For
 example an individual transfer up to 50,000 in a day so, sometimes people face difficulty whenever they transfer huge amounts in one day.
to
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To
 conclude, I
reinforce
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will reinforce
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 statement that today people using a
credit
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card
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 in their monthly purchase and its advantages overweight the disadvantages.

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