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People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchase. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
technology
 has become an indispensable part and parcel of our life. We cannot imagine our life without
technology
.
people
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People
 have used
credit
 cards for paying everywhere for everything.
This
 essay will highlight that it is certainly advantages despite a few inevitable drawbacks.
in
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In
this
 modern era, people live with
technology
.
we
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We
 use a
credit
card
 on our daily basis.
credit
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The credit card
Credit card
card
 is a small
technology gadget
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technology, gadget
, which has made
for
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of
from
 plastic and uses a small chip with the different numbers
.
Accept space
.
people
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People
 have used
this
technology
 everywhere.
due
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Due
 to
credit
 cards, we buy everything without giving paper
money
.
in
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In
this
technology
 gives you the opportunity to pay
money
 in digital form.
every
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Every
people
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person
have
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has
 a
credit
card
 in
this
 world and people know very well that how to utilize it wisely. There are lots of advantages to using
credit
 cards.
the
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The
 major benefit is people do not have to worry about caring their
money
.
for
Suggestion
For
 example: if people forgot their
money
 at home they can easily pay through the
credit
card
.
it
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It
 is very easy to pay to the
credit
card
.
the
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The
 youngster has used highly
this
technology
 for their convenience.
sometimes
Suggestion
Sometimes
 they pay many online to their friend and their love.
also
Suggestion
Also
, now time help of the
credit
card
 people can pay an online payment in any situation.
the
Suggestion
The
second
 benefit is paper
money
 is very hard to carry with us in our
pocket but
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pocket, but
 a
credit
card
 is a handy gadget and we can easily carry in our pocket. Now, through the light
on
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of
 the disadvantages.
this
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This
 is a modern
technology
 so the youngster has proper knowledge about
this
technology
 that how to use it
and where use it
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and where to use it
.
but
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But
, elder people has not enough knowledge about
this
technology
 so they have to face it lots of problems while using a
credit
card
.
sometimes owing
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Sometimes, owing
Sometimes owing
 to some
circumstances people
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circumstances, people
 lost their
card
 and it has very difficult for a person to make a new
card
 instantly.
it
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It
 has its own limits for payment.
for
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For
 example an individual transfer up to 50,000 in a day so, sometimes people face difficulty whenever they transfer huge amounts in one day.
to
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To
 conclude, I
reinforce
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will reinforce
this
 statement that today people using a
credit
card
 in their monthly purchase and its advantages overweight the disadvantages.

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