In many countries where there is high rate of unemployment, most students should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who have no hope of finding a job. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some regions in the world suffer from
nonemployment
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
and it is thought by some people the students in those countries should be merely able to study primary
education
. Studying secondary
education
is not necessary and even pointless since it is highly likely that they could not find any
job
. In my opinion, it is true that some countries have
problems offering
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problems, offering
jobs for its people.
However
, I believe that it is not a sufficient reason to prevent individuals from educating themselves
further
. It is evident that, in many parts of the world the governments
are proved
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have proven
ineffective in tackling the issue of unemployment.
Nevertheless
,
this
should not lead us
being
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to be
hopeless. There are some chances of being hired for the wanted vacant position.
Firstly
, the already filled
job
positions may always become available. Both the worker and the employer might terminate their contracts when they feel the other party does not meet the requirements or expectations.
In other words
, there can be an unsatisfactory performance and skills in the employee which culminates in firing that person.
As a result
, the new
job
vacancy occurs.
For example
, despite there are 60 percent of people who failed to find a
job
in Venezuela, the people commented on social media sites and said that they still have hopes finding a
job
.
Moreover
, the globalisation has contributed to increased mobility of each one of us.
Therefore
, if there is a high proportion of unemployment in a particular area, the one is able to travel easily to a place in which he or she can find a
job
which suits his or her interests and skills.
This
situation
also
applies to the ones who prefers higher wages than currently gained.
For example
, there are many Indian medical doctors in the United Arab Emirates, they have left their countries because of the low salaries and filled many high positions in Dubai, particularly.
Thus
, the secondary
education
is necessary to gain an employment in another place or in the city the person is located. In conclusion, the
governers
the head of a state government
governor
fail to take necessary measures
to
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for
prevention of
nonemployment
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
.
However
, there are other possibilities of gaining an employment. A jobless individual might move to another country to achieve better opportunities or he or she can wait for a position to become available. I believe that, the
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being of second rank or importance or value; not direct or immediate
secondary
education
is essential.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • job prospects
  • critical thinking
  • entrepreneurship
  • self-employment
  • social inequalities
  • societal progress
  • personal development
  • civic awareness
  • self-esteem
  • workforce
  • investment
  • industries
  • fundamental right
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