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some people think that people who choose job early and keep doing it are more like to get a satisfying career than those who frequently change their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals find a
job
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 early stage and keep doing it in order to make a career in the that field, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 do not agree that
this
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 is the best choice they can make
.
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.
This
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 might
work
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 for some employees
,
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,
but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe it causes problems for many
.
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 If
a
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an
employee
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 is sticking to one
job
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, he might miss the big
oppourtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
opportunity
 to explore in
differerent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 fields.
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employee
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An employee
Employee
The employee
 might
also
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 feel a lack of
job
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satisfaction
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. To find
a
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an
 aspiring career
employee
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 should
first
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 try different kinds of jobs So that eventually he/she will be able to find a suitable
work
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.
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In order to find a suitable
work
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 one should not miss out opportunity of working in different fields.There are different fields like business, communications, and commerce
,
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,
employee
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 should
work
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 in these different fields of
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job
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the job
 so that eventually will find a dream
job
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.
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.
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additionally
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Additionally
, by changing jobs frequently
employee
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 can acquire
work
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 experience provided that they will become more knowledgeable
.
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.
 Not only that it will make them easier to find another
job
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.
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.
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further
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Further
,
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,
 it is better to leave a
job
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 if you have less or zero
job
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satisfaction
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.
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.
Working with any firm for an extended period in a hope for a better future, but you feel lack of
job
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satisfaction
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,
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,
better find another
job
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.
most
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Most
 important
thing
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things
 about
job
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satisfaction
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 is that you are enjoying your
work
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 and you able to see an aspiring career in it
.
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.
if
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If
 an individual is not feeling any of it
,
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,
then
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 it is better to leave that
job
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 and find a
job
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 in which one is interested
.
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.
Nowadays
,
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,
almost all
company
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companies
 have probation period
,
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,
 it is not just for
employer
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employers
the employer
an employer
 to see our
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work but
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work, but
 it is
also
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 for
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employee
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the employee
 so that he can find out
,
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,
if it's really the place in which he
want
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
went
 to
work
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.
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.
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finally i
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Finally, I
finally I
Finally I
Finally i
 would conclude
,
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,
that it is better to find a good
job
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instead
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 of working in
same place
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the same place
 for
long time
Suggestion
a long time
.
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.

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