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Some individuals feel that working from home, while of benefit to employees, is actually a drawback to employers

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Some people think that working from
home
 appears to bring many benefits
for
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to
 the workers but not the employers.
in
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In
 my opinion, employers can take full of advantages of working
home
 as well On the one hand, the spread of telecommunication technology – using the internet, mobile phones and tablet
pc
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PC
 – has opened up a new range of possibilities for workers to carry on their tasks effectively and efficiently. By working from
home
, they can manage their time on their own and strike a balance between
work
 and rest.
For example
, employees have no need to get up early in the morning to get to
work
, even though they could theoretically run
business
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the business
a business
businesses
form
a giver or sender
from
 their bedroom. Not only that, without the presence of immediate supervisors, or less distractions of coworkers, unimportant meetings and unnecessary interruptions, employees feel less stressful and more relaxing, stimulating. Those two
factors both
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factors, both
 play a part in boosting their productivity and job satisfaction.
on
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On
 the other hand, by allowing employees to
work
 at
home
, employers can widen the base from which they recruit and boost the chances of capitalising on rich human capital. For instant, parents with childcare responsibilities and those with disabilities prefer to
work
 at
home
.
distance
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The distance
Distance
 between their workplace and their place of residence has never ceased to be a disadvantage.
Home
 working enables working people to perform their job at ease, and
thus
 give employers more options in human resource use.
in
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In
 conclusion, it is clear that working from
home
 can bring potential benefits for employers as much as employees. (264)
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