Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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Will my personal opinion, I know it will damage and effect special people like people with mental illness, people with those diseases who play

video

games who have violence like Grand Theft Auto we all know that you can do a lot of bad things in

this

game you can commit a crime and stole cars kill

specific group

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a specific group

of people all

this

leads to a crime or

ripe or stolen thing

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ripe or stolen things

the ripe or stolen thing

in the real life. There is a lot of researches about how much could the

video

game affect people in daily life and

also

researches about how much it effects the communicate of those people to the normal people who don't play

video

games or watch something violence on the television they have a small

issues

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issue

with communicate and working or playing or studying together. I think what we can do about

this

problem is ban

video

games and television

shows how

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shows, how

content violence

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content, violence

and blood scenes because we can't for play the damage because it can hit people with different ages

Fri Apr 17 2020

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Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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