Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

Will my personal opinion, I know it will damage and effect special people like people with mental illness, people with those diseases who play
video
games who have violence like Grand Theft Auto we all know that you can do a lot of bad things in
this
game you can commit a crime and stole cars kill
specific group
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a specific group
of people all
this
leads to a crime or
ripe or stolen thing
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ripe or stolen things
the ripe or stolen thing
in the real life. There is a lot of researches about how much could the
video
game affect people in daily life and
also
researches about how much it effects the communicate of those people to the normal people who don't play
video
games or watch something violence on the television they have a small
issues
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issue
with communicate and working or playing or studying together. I think what we can do about
this
problem is ban
video
games and television
shows how
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shows, how
content violence
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content, violence
and blood scenes because we can't for play the damage because it can hit people with different ages

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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