Many parents are unhappy because of the increasing amount of violence in their children by computer games, TV programs, and other leisure activities.

Now-a-days most of the parents are not happy
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as inhumanity is rising more in their offsprings by
time
pass activities and watching T.V and other computer games.Children uses cartoon channels for entertainment
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even in these channels vulgarities increased. Both parents and children cannot sit together and watch most of the programmes together.Currently, due to the busy schedules of both adults and children they do not have
time
to see a television or play computer games.But when they get
time
on weekends
they
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They
pass
time
by these activities.
For example
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used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected
Even
when playing video games
there
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There
is much of brutality like killing other side people it gives points and coins.
Hence
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,
by
this
children
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child
more likely tend to become negative.It influences them badly.
Secondly
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now-a-days most of the channels are producing laughter programmes.Adults together can watch these programmes,
this
helps to relives stress, but children cannot see these type of programmes because as there are performers in these programmes uses bad language which affects children and tries to copy them
also
these days most of the formers behave like females by wearing their dresses and behave like ladies.
This
affects children and learns bad things and try to copy them and especially do not give respect to females because most of the performers roles are criticizing females.
Thirdly
adults
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Adults
watch daily serials in which there is much vulgarity now-a-days.
This
shows male lead can do anything to impress female or to achieve her and
also
protagonists always makes plans to kill someone.By these inhumanity on children it effects more on their behaviour.
Also
media and newspapers show some of the brutality.Not all the shows and entertainment shows vulgarity, but definitely most of the programmes
shows
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show
inhumanity.
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