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Topic: Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While some people think that local rules and behaviours should be obeyed by tourists, others argue that
host
 countries should respect cultural diversity and not reject them.
Although
 there are several reasonable justifications about both views, I agree with the former and I think customs and laws of
host country
Suggestion
the host country
host countries
 should be followed by tourists. On the one hand, one of the most important justifications in respecting cultural differences by
host
 countries is economic benefits of
tourist industry
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the tourist industry
.
That is
, increasing number of
visitors improves
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visitors, improves
 tourist industry, which improve
economy
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the economy
 as a whole. There is a high probability that accepting cultural differences and giving tourists freedom leads to/results in attracting more tourists and spending more money
by
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with
 them.
Moreover
, due to short accommodation of tourists in
host
 countries, these diversities don’t cause serious problem for local people.
On the other hand
, people with opposing view argue that not following
host
 countries’ rules and customs by visitors causes serious problems in society.
In other words
, it is probable that they do something against local rules, which is
danger
Suggestion
a danger
 for health of society
.
Accept space
.
 For illustration, using
drug
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the drug
drugs
 is not against the rules in
few countries while
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a few countries, while
a few countries while
 it is forbidden and has
strict law
Suggestion
strict laws
a strict law
 about it in many countries and tourists should be aware of that and respect it.
Furthermore
, it is argued that laws and rules are set for inside the borders irrespective of local or foreign person. In conclusion, despite different views about following customs and behaviours of
host
 countries by tourists, in my opinion, visitors should know and respect
host
 countries
customs in
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customs, in
 order not to cause any issues for the local society and people.

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