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the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the rate of
man
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men
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 and women teachers in
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 six educational phases of the UK in 2010. There is
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 gap
of
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 percentage between male and female teachers for Nursery/
Pre-
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preschool
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school
 and Primary
school
. Approximately 90%
is
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 female and male is only 5%.
However
, the rate difference of each gender
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 smaller as grades up. Ultimately, nearly three times of men occupy the percentage of
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. College is the only setting
which
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male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 work equally in these six different settings. In
case
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 of men, the grade of education proceeds,
the
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 ratio of
them
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increase
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 especially
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hugely rise between primary
school
 and secondary
school
.
On the other hand
,
while
female
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females
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have
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 almost all of
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the rate
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 until secondary
school
, it gets less and less since college.
Overall
, the chart shows that in 2010
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 the UK, there are more women in primary educational settings and the opposite, men
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 in
higher
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a higher
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 educational
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational setting
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • nursery school
  • higher education
  • proportion
  • outnumber
  • trend
  • comparison
  • historical factors
  • social influence
  • teaching profession
  • data interpretation
  • balance
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