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: Some people think that paper money and coins will be replaced completely by credit cards and online methods of payment in the future. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that a vast
economical
Suggestion
economic
 argument has
happend
come to pass
happened
 about what if the paper money and coins can be
insted
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of the credit cards and E-methods or not. In my point of view,
Iam
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
am
 totally agree that it could become a true due to the
enorumos
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
 costs because of coins and paper creation;
morover
in addition
moreover
, they
aren't have
Suggestion
aren't having
don't have
haven't had
 a benefits options as the other side
do
Suggestion
does
. Most nations economically suffer because they have to prepare a huge budget and appropriate
matrial
the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
material
materials
 to produce paper money and coins;
on the other hand
, There is no need to have all these
elemnts
violent or severe weather (viewed as caused by the action of the four elements)
elements
 while talking about credit cards and online methods.
In addition
,
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
serveral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
facinating
capable of arousing and holding the attention
fascinating
 features will be usable in case of E-payment
such
 as: we could be updated with all our balance
transiactions
a written account of what transpired at a meeting
transactions
transaction
 and pay and withdraw wherever and whenever we are.
Furthermore
, it would be more
safty
the state of being certain that adverse effects will not be caused by some agent under defined conditions
safety
 as all experiments have approved.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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