Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so?

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In these days the number of children who are working in part-time jobs due to the encouragement of their parents are increasing.

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many may see it as a positive

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is not a trend without drawbacks.

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essay will suggest that learning vocational skills

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and a reduced motivation to study is the primary demerit. The

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and foremost plus point of doing part-time jobs for children is it can create a golden opportunity in an effort to learn occupational abilities that are not taught in schools.

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, earning money will progress a sense of accountability that in turn develops financial management capabilities.

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, they get exposed to the people of different

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and attitudes that inculcate social skills.

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, many people negatively contend that these temporary part-time jobs can deviate the young minds from studies and they lean more towards money.

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, the hectic schedule of work and studies makes them stressful and they get fatigued while struggling to make the balance between education and job. After

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both the views it is crystal clear that part-time jobs for children comes with more negative consequences on them which overshadows the advantages of it.

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strongly suggest that parents should only let their children do part time job if it is really needed to cover them financially and keep a check on their working schedule and activities.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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5 paragraphs

239 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

responsibility
punctuality
work ethic
financial literacy
budgeting
time management
work experience
career prospects
independence
self-esteem
communication
interpersonal skills
academic responsibilities
school performance
hobbies
relaxation
well-being
stress
fatigue
premature adulthood
childhood experiences

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Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so?

Fully explain your ideas

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It is generally observed that almost all high level jobs are done by men. Does it mean that the government should encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? Do you agree or disagree with this proposition.