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In companies, promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company and not to somebody outside the company or new hiring. Agree or disagree?

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People have different views on promotions of high positions. Some think that internal employees should be given a high position, whereas, others are in favour of hiring employees from outside. I agree with the latter view as external personnel possesses higher qualification and years’ of
experience
. High skill is an imperative cause behind hiring a new employee for a higher position and it demands an employee who is well qualified. Nowadays, youngsters go to the world-famous universities to pursue higher education in order to have
such
 posts in the
company
. Along with
this
, they tend to do many courses which help them acquiring promotions.
Nonetheless
, it is true that they enter into the workforce, they are given
such
 posts due to an advance educational level.
For example
, the Times of India reported in March 2020 revealed that in Google, many higher positions are filled with new talented employees who possess an extra degree rather than having an only university degree. Another reason for offering the managerial
post
 to the outsider is many years’ of
experience
 as
such
 workers do not need any training session. It is undoubtedly true when a
company
 looks for employees to give higher position they not only look for their
experience
 years, but
also
 they should be multi-tasked because
such
 skills ultimately determine the fate of the
company
.
For instance
, a recent study by Harvard University found that 49% of personnel are proven worthy and reliable to their
post
 as they don’t have any training session. In conclusion,
although
 some believe employees within the
company
 should be given a high
post
 due to working for many years in the
company
, I think well qualified and
experience
 is more reliable for the managerial
post
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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