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The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these sources of energy in remote and untouched natural places. Do you think the advantages of locating oil and gas in these places outweigh the disadvantages of damaging these places?

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It is indeed a true fact that today's rising demand of fossil fuels drastically increasing never before.
Therefore
, some people come forward to put an argument that now it's time to look resources in remote and untouched area.
However
, I opine that disadvantage of damaging natural land outweighs advantages of getting oil and gas. There are ample reasons of the disadvantages.
First
 of all, for the finding resources we must drill and damage landscape.
This
 lead to local habitat like animals loss their land.
Secondly
, sometimes due to wrong drilling location, it may cause serious incident.
For instance
, in the gulf of the Mexico
such
 type of incident happen, which result into earthquake or Tsunami.
Thirdly
, due to drilling operations, which creates an immense amount of noise pollution. For
this
 reason global warming increases day by day.
On the other hand
, there are advantages of locating oil and gas in
Such
 places continue fulfil demand of fossil fuels. Which leads to stable oil prices and smooth the economy.
Moreover
, it
also provide
Suggestion
also provides
 employment opportunities to local people of
such
 place. In conclusion, I do admit that by searching energy sources can help in an economy and employment, but we should not have to forget the consequences of natural calamities and the huge effect on global warming.

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