The two diagrams illustrate the main parts of a hot air balloon and indicate how it ascends and descends in flight. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These diagrams demonstrate how the hot
air
balloon rises and falls.Overall
, It's clear that there are some stages in the process, beginning with open
the gas tanks in ascending and Replace the word
opening
end
it in descending.
Wrong verb form
ending
According to
the diagrams
the first step after the passengers ride is opening the gas tanks and the Add a comma
,diagrams
air
is heated in burner
which is located under the balloon envelope Correct article usage
a burner
next
that the hot air
transfer
Replace the word
transferred
up
by the valve cord and Change preposition
apply
hence
the balloon is raising
The second
stage is descend
Change the verb form
is descended
is descending
in
which Change preposition
apply
it
occurs three main steps. Correct pronoun usage
apply
first
the valve opened after that the Add a comma
,first
air
comes out and it became cooler because the gas tank is closing so no air
to heatSubmitted by hala on
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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