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The government should allocate more funding to teaching science rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress

#government #science #subjects #country #progress
I totally agree that
science
 is based on the experiment.learnin
g is bas
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Learning
ed on the teaching because people are learning through teaching and some people are learning through experience .
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Furthermore
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rn
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m
ent should
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the government
 allocate more funding to teachin
g
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teach
science
 because they want new research for develop
ment of cou
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the development
ntry
. Devel
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the country
a country
opment is supplement important for the country . I be
li
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eve that other
subject
 are imp
ort
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ant for social and political point of view. Most of exams a
re ba
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the exams
sed on the social
science
 , math
em
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atics and Gujarati . Some
p
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eople believe that the government should more monetary resources for
science
 teaching
subject
 at school and college level as compared to other subjects . The
su
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bject will help in overall
personality development of stu
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the overall personality development
dents . It i
s
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only the
subject
 we should discover more product and new things . Ther
e
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are ample opportunities for employment in the field of
science
 and technology .
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ample , i ha
ve
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refers to the speaker or writer
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 degree of
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in
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field . So w
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the science field
e
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should research based on formula
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a formula
the formula
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ay ,
any of various alternatives; some other
another
stud
yi
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ng arts at school or college level helps students to vent out their stress. Some children are splendid in other subjects that does not mean they are not good in other f
ield.
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 The more the job opportunities , to b
et
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ter will be employment generation leading to economic growth and development .
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 In conclusion , gove
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ment should not only allocate only
science
 subject
s but
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subjects, but
also
 to other subjects
such
 as art . Othe
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subjects will help them remain healthy and stay fit .
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