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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
overall
Linking Words
 the chart illustrates the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories in eight timeline first, let us talk about
local
Correct article usage
the local
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- fixed
line
Fix the agreement mistake
lines
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. the highest is 1999 (more than ninety billion) and the lowest is 2002 and 1995 with more than 70 billion.
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next
Add a comma
,next
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we
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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let
Add a missing verb
let's
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 talk about the national and international-fixed
line
Fix the agreement mistake
lines
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. the top is 2002 and the lower rank is 1995. in
Correct article usage
the other
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other hand
Change the wording
another hand
other hands
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 the mobiles the topmost is 2002 and the bottom in the leaderboard is 1995.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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